Week 5 Discussion. Literature & Language Coursework

For this discussion topic, we consciously practice the argumentative, analytical body paragraph structure discussed in the course modules and which we should use in papers in this class (see the pdfs in previous weeks). Part of writing well is learning to write consciously, with awareness of sentence purpose. Often instinctive writing is written for ourselves, not with our readers (our audience) in mind. So, we have to learn to think about and to consider both structure and content as we write -- and revise.
Consider the linked essay you've read and the two TEDx videos you've watched (linked under Resources in this week's module). Choosing two of these, explain the power of thinking consciously about your writing, the benefits of breaking writing down into manageable steps, or the best way to understand revision.
this is the link to the video you can use.
https://www(dot)youtube(dot)com/watch?v=xqK6-ePxPa8&mobileflash=1&app=desktop
We will treat your primary post as a body paragraph (you could assume this paragraph would be part of a larger essay, even though it's not). You must use the structure below, and LABEL each sentence as you write it (don't merely number the sentences).
Topic Sentence: Use this sentence to both identify your main point in response to one of the topics above (topics are both underlined and in green print above).
Claim # 1: This first claim in your paragraph will state your first main idea in response to the overall topic. This claim should relate in some way to your topic sentence.
Evidence # 1: Choose a quotation from one of the texts (linked essay or either or the two TEDx Talks) that supports your first claim.
Explanation # 1: Explain your point about the evidence above to your readers.
Transition: Try to include a sentence that connects to your next claim.
Claim # 2: This second claim or point in your paragraph should continue your discussion.
Evidence # 2: Choose a different quotation from one of the texts (linked essay or either or the two TEDx Talks) that supports your second claim.
Explanation # 2: Explain your point about the evidence above to your readers.
Concluding Sentence: End your paragraph by making a point about the larger significance of the topic or or how it relates to writing successfully more generally.
Note: Most beginning writers find it easier, at first, to treat each of these body paragraph elements as ONE sentence. However, you might need two sentences, for example, to explain a particularly weighty piece of evidence. If you spend more than three sentences on any one element, though, you're probably being repetitive or off-topic.
Response Posts may make suggestions about the organization within each writer's paragraph or they may comment on the larger significance of the topic or quotations chosen. If you do disagree with a writer, it's a good idea to phrase your response as follows: "What I think you said is . . . But you might also consider . . . " In any case, we are an academic class, so politeness and consideration is always expected.
Importantly, both the primary and response post for this discussion board should be written (no videos for this post). Your goals are both to practice the writing structure above and to discuss the linked resources.