This is an unqualified paper and you have to make changes. The full text is 10,000 words in total, but the place you need to modify is only five or six thousand words. I will put all the papers and papers I have written and the feedback and comments that the teacher gave me. Please write according to the requirements of the paper and feedback, it is best to keep my writing style. You can change the title of the paper if necessary. If you have any questions, please contact me in time.
The following is the teacher's opinion
I will need to give you opportunities to engage with journal papers which include theories and empirical papers. If you could find data, for example, on electronic trade and non-electronic trade for a number of countries and compare this over the last few years, it would be a first step. But to be sure, it would be even better if these data could be related to specific firms e.g. within the clothing retail sector. If you have data for firms that ado e-trade, mixed e-trade and street retail, or just street retail, you could use these to see if over the years the e-trade has helped these firms to increase their market share, or even expand the market (i.e. inducing people to buy more).
From a quick look, I would have liked the research question that you have to be clearer and (ideally) to arise from the literature. You need to also be more careful with the structure of your report: for example, the text between methodology and results is unclear to me in which section it belongs. I did not understand from the method if you are indeed applying a method or this is synthesis of evidence to create a case study. If so, ensure that the discussion of each case is supported by evidence and references and that there is a clear conclusion. In other words, we use case studies to learn something practical – this needs to be clearly communicated. Finally, the conclusions section seems a bit long to me and you should note that we never introduce new information in the conclusions.
hey, I'm Crystal, do you see the paper I wrote? Is this paper easy to modify?