Peer Review: Deadly and Deceiving Smile

Essay Peer Review
Your Name: ________________________________ Writer’s Name: Toepel
1 How does the title of the essay affect you as a reader?
The title Deadly and Deceiving Smile alerts me as a reader. It shows that not all smiles should be trusted. Before reading the title of the essay, I thought smiles always mean good. Currently, I cannot trust all smiles because some are potentially dangerous.
2 Locate the thesis paragraph(s). How can the thesis paragraph (usually NOT the first paragraph) be stronger and clearer? Is the writer convincing there? What would you suggest be added to make it clearer and more emphatic?
The second paragraph is the thesis paragraph. It is well developed from the first paragraph, which introduces suspense to the reader. The reader becomes curious to know more about Ted Bundy. The thesis statement is explicit but it can be improved by adding specific details about the impact of Bundy’s deadly and deceiving smile.
3 Can you locate a paragraph of opposing argument? Does the opposing argument offer examples? How can the writer more successfully use an alternative viewpoint to clarify his or her Slant or thesis?
The essay does not contain an opposing argument. It only has arguments that profile serial killing and Bundy negatively.
4 How effective is the opening paragraph in engaging and interesting you as a reader, and how can it be improved?
The opening paragraph is effective in introducing the essay. It entails rhetorical questions, which create curiosity and suspense. The reader is eager to read the content of the essay to find the answers to the questions. The paragraph can be improved by introducing personalizing the content. The writer can ask the reader how they if they know any serial killer, before introducing the questions. This would make the reader relate the q...