Peer Review of Social media and its addictiveness among the youth.
Ideally, I want you to comment on a person’s draft in a natural setting; don’t treat this as a“formal” assignment, but as if you were commenting back to someone in a classroomdiscussion, focusing on areas of strength, but giving that person direction about what you thinkcould make the draft stronger. You might want to use language in your response like, “I like theway this draft started because…”; “I got confused when…”; “I had to back up and rereadwhen…”; “I saw your point here, but then I got lost again because…” Phrases like this allow forthe reader to get a better picture of where problems are happening.You will construct 200-word minimum responses that comments on the strengths andweaknesses for each writer’s draft, and what you believe could be done to improve thepaper.Everyone’s draft will be at a different point, so it might be helpful to use the general suggestionsbelow as a guide as you construct your feedback.
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Peer Review of Social media and its addictiveness among the youth.
I like the introduction to this piece. The development towards the problem is clear as the reader needs to know how social media began and the concern of social media's popularity on youths. However, the thesis statement does not give enough details about how to argue out the addiction topic. I also feel that the introduction should have included the statistics in the last sentence of the second paragraph. It is essential to give the country and global statistics about the use of social media. A citation should accompany the statistics to ensure the reader can confirm the legitimacy of the figures.
The draft presents valid arguments on social media addiction on youths and...
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