Implementing a Revision Strategy

Before you begin, please review the discussion rubric (click here) to make sure you fulfill all of the required tasks. You can also download/print the rubric by clicking here.
Let's look over the current draft of your paper in preparation for submitting your final draft next week. You can download another copy of your draft, if necessary, by returning to 5-6: Assignment 2, Milestone 1: Draft.
Then, take a look at your paper while asking yourself the following questions:
First, looking over each section of the draft, in what area did you feel you did particularly well? What made it so strong, and how will you use these strengths in other sections of the draft that may need additional work?
Second, select a single paragraph from your essay that you think needs the most work. Then, using one of the revision strategies outlined in the reading this week, revise the paragraph. Remember to go further than surface-level tweaks like grammar and mechanics—the paragraph should be thoroughly revised.
When you're finished, post the original paragraph and the revised paragraph to the small group discussion board. Then, in one paragraph, walk us through the revision process you chose and explain the purpose of the revision (how did it ultimately make your essay stronger?). The original paragraph, the revised paragraph, and your explanation of the revision will be your original discussion board post (at least three fully developed paragraphs).
When responding to two peers, discuss their revisions and offer additional tips and support, pulling from the readings, your own experiences, and the revisions themselves, as guidance. Remember, as with the peer workshop in Week 4, it's important to be thorough and honest here.
Your response posts should be at least one fully developed paragraph (5-8 sentences) in length.
As with the first discussion, be sure to check back on this forum throughout the week to see what others have posted to your thread, and respond to questions and comments in an engaging manner. These posts will vary in length.
*** I have attached the Rubric with the instructions from the teacher and I also attached the last paper that you wrote for me that is needed for this discussion.