7.8 Essay #4 Peer Review. Literature & Language Assignment.

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7.8 Essay #4 Peer Review
Amber
The introduction paragraph introduces the topic touching on the main themes in White Noise and the three main sources. The three sources focus on different interpretations of the novel, which makes the topic broad rather than narrowing down to specific ideas and themes. The introduction is long and while there was a need to offer context, the content of the three sources ought to have been summarized and provide the most useful and relevant information. The thesis statement focuses on the thoughts of the three writers focusing on the book’s main themes such as the fear of death, identity, technology, family life as well as analysis and critiques of the novel.
The paragraphs summarize the writings of three different sources on Don DeLillo’s White Noise, but the body paragraphs are mostly summaries. Integrating the original source in the paragraphs rather than merely evaluating the reviews, commentaries and critiques, would have strengthened the ideas and provided context. While the ideas flow from the topic sentences, this needed to be clear from the first sentence to avoid confusion, while also linking the supporting ideas with the topic sentence. The use of transition words would also have strengthened the essay. In each of the body paragraphs focused on a single source there was no transition from one paragraph to the next and this would have improved coherence.
The conclusion highlights the themes the fear of death and changes in the America society, but does not link this to the current times. The conclusion ought to have also mentioned how the societal changes in the novel mirror changes in th...