Comparison of Doan and Driscoll's Writings

It is not an essay, you just need to read 2 essay and use E101 structure to answer for each one, please let me know which one is Thu 205 and which one is Mask making. Thank you Introduction: 1. How well did the introduction adequately introduce the topic? Why/why not? The introduction is attention grabbing. It may be beneficial to introduce not only the authors but also their speeches and explain a little bit more about your main talking points. 2. What is your peer's thesis statement? If you cannot figure out the thesis, what feedback can you give your peer that would help him/her focus the paper? The thesis statement of this essay is “Former president John F. Kennedy and public figure Martin Luther King used words to persuade their audience in many different ways.” This thesis statement could be more focused by specifically addressing what the paper’s purpose is. Body paragraphs: 1. How well did each paragraph support one idea of the essay's thesis? If not, identify which paragraphs need more development and why. Paragraph 1 talks about how King relates America’s unfulfilled promise to a check that cannot be cashed due to insufficient funds. This essay says that he uses this metaphor in order to relate to his audience but maybe you can support that with how that impacted the audience. In paragraph 2, it is talked about how Kennedy relates by addressing the concern of the audience. That could better support the thesis by saying how or giving specific examples. The point of paragraph 3 is that Kennedy’s Inaugural Address had such a lasting impression, it may be helpful to give specific examples of how. 2. How well do the ideas flow from one topic to the next, logically guiding the reader from start to finish? If not, point put where it starts to unravel and how to get back on track. I think the essay flows. The prompt mentions analyzing similar appeals, I did not recognize how similarities were pointed out. I also did not see attention show to the specific rhetorical strategies. 3. How well does the student offer a thorough analysis of the evidence used? (This is the "E" in the AXES model). If not, point out which ideas need further elaboration. Quotes were used from the text to support each paragraph. I felt they were well chosen to support the strategies you discussed. I also felt that the quotes were thoroughly analyzed. Conclusion: 1. How well does the conclusion discuss the SIGNIFICANCE of the student's argument (for example, does the conclusion discuss why the student's argument is relevant today)? Provide suggestions for improving the conclusion. The conclusion was a bit short, only 3 sentences. It was good, but not narrow enough and should maybe stick to only the ideas that were already introduced in the essay. Try restating your thesis and major points of the paragraphs in the essay. 2. Does your peer's paper fall between the page limit? If the paper is too long, make suggestions for condensing. If the paper is too short, make suggestions where the ideas can be expanded. This paper is 3 pages, the guideline is 3-4. For length, you could expand your paper by elaborating on the concluding paragraph. You could also talk a little bit more about the lasting impact and relate the two authors to each other.