Textual Analysis: The Border Patrol State

This is about analyzing using the P"I"E format.
here is a direction of the essay.
Essay 2: Textual Analysis Essay
The textual analysis essay invites you to analyze and formally argue for your 
interpretation of one of the readings covered in unit 2 (Silko, Anzaldua, or Eisele). If 
you have a burning desire to analyze a text from unit 1, you should propose that to 
me in an email. At the most basic level of this essay, you’ll want to tell the reader 
what the text means to you and how you came to this understanding, based on an 
analysis of various elements in the text. First, you should determine the main 
message (your interpretation) of the text; then, tear it apart by identifying the 
writing strategies and rhetorical devices the author uses to convey meaning.
As your essay will necessarily be concerned with how the text affects the reader, 
you’ll need to venture an educated guess as to who the audience is. Then, make notes 
on significant techniques and features of the text followed by thoughts on how these 
features operate. The following is a list of “strategies,” “techniques” and “features” 
you might consider. Keep in mind that this is not a complete list. For a more complete 
list, see pp. 124-125 in “A Student’s Guide…”
-Description (setting and characters)
-Atmosphere and tone
-Use of examples
-Use of quotation (of self and others)
-Diction (word choice)
-Appeals to emotion, reason, credibility
-Stories (personal and reported)
You will definitely need a strong thesis statement in the introduction and a claim in 
each body paragraph, one that examines and analyzes a particular element of the 
text. For an example, take a look at the following claim, in which Yeats supports the 
main point his poem, and the strategy he uses to do so:
Through a representation of a painting, Yeats tells his readers in 
the starkest possible terms why he can no longer function as a 
romantic poet of pleasant images.
The first part of the claim, “Through a representation of a painting,” announces the 
writing strategy that Yeats employs to suggest the meaning of the text, that he 
“...can no longer function as a romantic poet of pleasant images.” The rest of this 
paragraph would then examine lines in the poem in which Yeats responds to the 
painting and would analyze how those lines work, offering quotes, paraphrases, and 
summary as evidence in the process. Your essay should be brimming with evidence, 
with at least two examples per paragraph.
You will find the P.I.E. (point, illustration, explanation) method of argumentation 
useful in structuring your body paragraphs. The P.I.E. method, as we have discussed in 
class, includes a strong topic sentence (“P") followed by at least one or two illustrations (“I”) followed by an explanation (“E”) of how the illustrations prove the 
point. The following is an example of a P.I.E. paragraph using the Yeats example 
above. You will note that the P.I.E. formula does not necessarily mean one sentence 
per element; in the example below, for instance, the “E”is two sentences long. 
Point: Through a representation of a painting, Yeats tells his 
readers in the starkest possible terms why he can no longer function 
as a romantic poet of pleasant images.
Illustration: In contrast to the painting, in lines 12-15, Yeats paints 
a picture of an unrelenting spirit, a muse, who is the polar 
opposite of the gentle, teaching centaur in the original painting.
Explanation: Yeats sets the expectation that the poem will be about a 
gentle, teaching centaur, but shocks the reader when the “teacher” of 
the poem turns out to be a harsh, unforgiving master. This disconnect 
between the poem and the painting emphasizes Yeats’ point that he 
is determined to tell the reader that he won’t and can’t be the romantic 
poet who obediently portrays a beautiful painting with a beautiful 
poem.
Please also include an introduction that briefly summarizes the text and makes a 
cogent thesis statement. For help on writing your introduction, see pp. 50-51 in the 
“A Student’s Guide.” Finally, write an effective conclusion; for help on conclusions, 
see p. 63 in same text. 
here is an example of a pie paragraph
This paragraph follows a P.I.E.E. format. 
Anzaldua’s extreme tone in “The Homeland…” is important to her essay, because it 
corresponds with the extreme suffering of those whose homeland is Aztlan (Point). In 
one instance, she writes, “The gringo, locked into the fiction of white superiority, 
seized complete political power, stripping Indians and Mexicans of their land while 
their feet were still rooted in it” (Illustration). Her tone her is quite insistent and 
leaves no room for interpretation, nor does it suggest in any way that there is another 
side of the story (Explanation). In these ways, it is extreme (Explanation).
I have chosen to analyze the essay of Lesile Marmon Silko, The border patrol state
you can find the essay in 
http://www(dot)tucsonweekly(dot)com/tw/09-26-96/cover.htm
here is a bit of what i wrote 
Textual Analysis
In the story “The Border Patrol State” written by a Native American writer named Leslie Marmon Silko , who is a victim of border patrolmen brutality, tells a story talking mainly about the racism targeting Native Americans and Chicanos in the United States by the border patrol agents. By using the strategies of giving examples of her own experiences and others towards the border patrol agent and using an emotional tone, she argues that the border patrol is abusing the rights of Native Americans and Chicanos in the United States.
The first strategy that silko uses to support her argument is giving examples about her personal experiences with the border patrol. She argues that the border patrol agents are abusing people based on their “look”. The first example she uses is her first experience with the border patrol which was: “I saw the headlights and emergency flashers of six vehicles-border patrol cars and a van were blocking both lanes of the highway, I will never forget that night beside the highway. There was an awful feeling of menace and violence.” This example that she gave us talks about the first time she was stopped by the border patrol agents. She can sense the feeling of violence just from the way the agents looked at her. She use emotion here to explain the situation she was in. she also said “it was clear that the uniformed men would be only too happy to drag us out of the car if we did not speedily comply with their request”, by saying this she was illustrating that the border patrol agents were looking for trouble. Another example she give is this “the weird anger of these border patrolmen made me think about descriptions in the report of Argentine Police and military officers who became addicted to tortures. When they ran out of suspects to torture and kill they resorted to the random abduction of citizens. I thought how easy it would be for the border patrol to shoot us and leave our body.” When she gave an example about a book she read she related it to the border patrolmen to illustrate the idea of the kind of mentality these men had. 
the essay must be around 800 words