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The aim of this cross-sectional study was to determine the significant limitations, sensitivity, specificity, partial correlations, and odds ratios of nutrient intake in patients with and without hypertension with Type 2 diabetes mellitus. Diabetic patients (n=220) with clinical diagnosis of hypertension and diabetic patients (n=230) without hypertension were included in this study. The questionnaire form included a list of 65 food items formed from five main food groups (grain, meat and alternatives, dairy products, vegetables fruits and fat) and 25 dietary habits. When both groups were compared and analyzed by logistic regression, black tea consumption (OR=0.823, Pb.001), vegetables–fruits scores (OR=0.853, Pb.001), triglycerides (OR=0.726, Pb.05), waist-to-hip ratio (WHR) (OR=0.777, Pb.01) and high-density lipoprotein cholesterol (HDL-C) (OR=0.526, Pb.001) made significant differences. In ROC curves, the area under the curve of black tea (0.921), vegetables–fruits (0.906), triglycerides (0.889), WHR (0.881) and HDL-C (0.820) provided high accuracy to distinguish between patients with and without hypertension (Pb.001). In diabetic patients without hypertension, significant partial correlations were observed between blood pressure and dairy products (systolic: r =) 0.14; diastolic: r =) 0.14, Pb.05), vegetables–fruits groups (systolic: r =) 0.18; diastolic: r =) 0.17, Pb.01) and black tea intake (systolic: r =) 0.23; diastolic: r =) 0.22, Pb.001). It has been found that higher intake of black tea and vegetables–fruits consumption in diabetic patients protect against developing hypertension.
Keywords: Diabetes; Hypertension; Vegetables; Black tea; ROC curve
Celik, F., Celik, M., & Akpolat, V. (2009). Nutritional risk factors for the development of hypertension in diabetic patients. Journal of Diabetes and its Complications, 23(5), 304-309. doi:http://dx.doi.org/10.1016/j.jdiacomp.2008.02.005
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